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A confession:

    ma, there are seahorses dancing in the library


Autumn has come to my hometown.

Today; cool, clear and sunny--

April, a stuttering fool.


3am, and kings slumber;

Sunday falls heavy,

eyes wet with gasoline.


For :iconthetitlepage:'s Title Poem Contest

This was fun. A LOT of fun. Having not submitted anything to deviantART for over a year, this contest was a great way to get back into writing poetry! I do actually have some original poetry that has been floating around in my notebook for several months, and I'm hoping that it will soon make an appearance here. :la:

If you haven't already, check out this contest / check out #TheTitlePage! :love:


Deviation titles used:
Dance backwards, darling (Title) My own
a confession by =back-bones
ma, there are seahorses dancing in the library by *julia-caitlin
autumn has come to my hometown by ~hungryheart83
Today, Cool, Clear and Sunny by ~xBassxHarmingx [I replaced a comma with a semicolon]
april, a stuttering fool by ~DamagedHomewrecker
3AM by ~SoLoveIsPunk
Kings by *shrimpHEBY
Slumber by ~joshua-andrews
Sunday falls by =back-bones
Heavy by ~GeeeO
eyes by *MartaSyrko
Wet with Gasoline by ~sliverofciel

Please check out these deviations - they're all rather lovely! :heart:


On a slightly related note, how does one submit to the 'Visual & Found Poetry' category? Sta.sh wouldn't let me, so I've categorised this as 'Free Verse'. :paranoid:

5 May 2013: I got an Honourable Mention in the Title Poem contest! Check out the amazing winners and other Honourable Mentions here
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3wyl Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm not too sure the full stop after 'library' is well placed.. perhaps you could leave it open ended, but that could just be me. :nod:

I like how this feels quite disjointed, and yet there is a sense of flow with it all in terms of time placements.. you've mentioned the season, month, time.. and then the day, and.. yeah, for each, there is depth added to it all with a statement or so putting more context to things.

I think you've managed to say a lot in this piece even though it's not prose or anything like that. It's quite beautiful. :nod:
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cality Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I actually like that idea a lot – it would kind of leave that line, with its bizarre nature, more open. Thanks for the suggestion!

Thank you very much for your thoughtful comment! I really enjoyed finding titles to use for this poem.

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3wyl Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Titles are interesting, I think. They can change a piece sometimes. :nod:

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cality Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed!

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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just a little note to let you know your piece has been FEATURED as part of your prize for the Title Poem Contest. Congrats on your honorable mention! [link]
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cality Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :aww:
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Riemea Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Something new from you, yay!! :woohoo: Me wants moaar! Some of that poetry floating around in your notebook would be great! :la:

So, back to the actual poem. I love the idea of stringing together deviation titles, and I think you did a really great job with that! Keep it up!:heart:
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cality Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, yes! :eager:

Thank you very much! :heart:
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Riemea Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:w00t:

You're very welcome :heart:
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cality Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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