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Perched in your throat,
it is like a prayer;

an exhalation
against your palms,

soft as a secret
in the womb.


          How weightless we are
          under the tender moon

          in this enchanted twilight.

"In his blue gardens men and girls came and went like moths among the whisperings and the champagne and the stars." The Great Gatsby by F. Scott Fitzgerald.

This poem might be a teeny bit inspired by the The Great Gatsby. :paranoid: I actually found the book very difficult to get into, story-wise. I think Fitzgerald's writing is absolutely beautiful (I adore the quote I've included above), but I just didn't find the story compelling. However, it definitely picked up towards the end, and, having seen the film, I'll definitely be giving it a re-read at some point. I might have to buy my own copy or something though, as I read my sister's copy, which she would only let me read on the condition that I didn't bend the spine...

Anyway, any comments are much appreciated! :heart: I'd be interested to hear your thoughts on the formatting, as well. I initally had something that was a bit more... broken (sort of like in 'Sweven' and 'Splits lips upon stars'), but eventually thought that maybe something simpler would be better.

Also, two poems in one month! :O 


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    by `dreamsinstatic in Friday Night Features CII


17/07/13
Thank you so much to =Riemea for suggesting and ^Beccalicious for featuring this! (Please send some love their way :love:)
Thank you all for the lovely comments and favs. I'm afraid that I won't be able to personally thank for favs (if only work wasn't keeping me so busy :crying:), but they are greatly appreciated. I will reply to every comment soon though. Thank you! :heart:
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Moon-spun moths by `cality ( Suggested by Riemea and Featured by Beccalicious )
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andsisko Oct 15, 2013  Professional Interface Designer
Nice poem, i decided to make it illustration of it. Check it out at andsisko.deviantart.com/art/Dr…
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cality Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And gosh, that's really lovely of you, I'm glad my poem could inspire you! <3
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andsisko Oct 18, 2013  Professional Interface Designer
😊 thanks to you 
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cality Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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italynekokawaii Sep 18, 2013  Student Writer
Amazing poem. Though I wonder if there is more meaning to this (obviously yes)? Would you mind explaining to me? I think its is very beautiful but I'd love to hear what you were thinking as you wrote it.
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cality Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for such a nice comment!

I was actually mostly thinking of The Great Gatsby when I wrote this poem. :nod:
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italynekokawaii Sep 21, 2013  Student Writer
Ah, very nice. I love'd that book. Haven't seen the new movie yet but would like to. :) I invite you to check out my new page see if you like my writing!
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cality Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The movie was pretty good!

:glomp:
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7markus7 Aug 28, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
very beautiful poem
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cality Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Thanks for the :+fav:, too. :)
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