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Perched in your throat,
it is like a prayer;

an exhalation
against your palms,

soft as a secret
in the womb.


          How weightless we are
          under the tender moon

          in this enchanted twilight.

"In his blue gardens men and girls came and went like moths among the whisperings and the champagne and the stars." The Great Gatsby by F. Scott Fitzgerald.

This poem might be a teeny bit inspired by the The Great Gatsby. :paranoid: I actually found the book very difficult to get into, story-wise. I think Fitzgerald's writing is absolutely beautiful (I adore the quote I've included above), but I just didn't find the story compelling. However, it definitely picked up towards the end, and, having seen the film, I'll definitely be giving it a re-read at some point. I might have to buy my own copy or something though, as I read my sister's copy, which she would only let me read on the condition that I didn't bend the spine...

Anyway, any comments are much appreciated! :heart: I'd be interested to hear your thoughts on the formatting, as well. I initally had something that was a bit more... broken (sort of like in 'Sweven' and 'Splits lips upon stars'), but eventually thought that maybe something simpler would be better.

Also, two poems in one month! :O 


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17/07/13
Thank you so much to =Riemea for suggesting and ^Beccalicious for featuring this! (Please send some love their way :love:)
Thank you all for the lovely comments and favs. I'm afraid that I won't be able to personally thank for favs (if only work wasn't keeping me so busy :crying:), but they are greatly appreciated. I will reply to every comment soon though. Thank you! :heart:
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Moon-spun moths by `cality ( Suggested by Riemea and Featured by Beccalicious )
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MatthewLittle Featured By Owner Edited Jun 13, 2014  Student Writer
So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past.
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cality Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I do like that last line. :nod:
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner May 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful poem! I tried to read the Great Gatsby, but I got bored after the first few pages.  =P 
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cality Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Haha, it's quite slow at the beginning but it gets more interesting towards the end. :giggle:
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
hm, maybe I'll try reading it again then... I just get bored easily, so we'll have to see how that works out. :XD:
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cality Featured By Owner May 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
At least it's a pretty short novel though. :D

What kind of books do you normally like reading?
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner May 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
yeah I was surprised by how short it was! only like a hundred pages! :O

i prefer YA fiction or action/adventure/fantasy type. :nod: sometimes I'll read out of my genre if someone recommends a book or I hear lots of good stuff about it, but generally I prefer fiction. (= 
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cality Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed. :D

Sounds quite like me actually! :highfive: Is there anything you'd recommend? :la:
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:nod:

really? :D well I really loved the Graceling series, (I don't remember who the author is though :P) Harry Potter, Percy Jackson, Dr. Bird's Advice for Sad Poets, Navigating Early, The Selection, Divergent, The Hunger Games... that's all I can think of off the top of my head. XD 
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cality Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, Graceling! I've had some trouble with that book (so haven't managed to read the series). Lots of people have said it's really good, but I just couldn't get into it! :noes:

LOVE Harry Potter, and I enjoyed Divergent and The Hunger Games too. :D
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