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Moon-spun moths

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July 17, 2013
Moon-spun moths by `cality
Featured by BeccaJS
Suggested by Riemea
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Perched in your throat,
it is like a prayer;

an exhalation
against your palms,

soft as a secret
in the womb.


          How weightless we are
          under the tender moon

          in this enchanted twilight.

"In his blue gardens men and girls came and went like moths among the whisperings and the champagne and the stars." The Great Gatsby by F. Scott Fitzgerald.

This poem might be a teeny bit inspired by the The Great Gatsby. :paranoid: I actually found the book very difficult to get into, story-wise. I think Fitzgerald's writing is absolutely beautiful (I adore the quote I've included above), but I just didn't find the story compelling. However, it definitely picked up towards the end, and, having seen the film, I'll definitely be giving it a re-read at some point. I might have to buy my own copy or something though, as I read my sister's copy, which she would only let me read on the condition that I didn't bend the spine...

Anyway, any comments are much appreciated! :heart: I'd be interested to hear your thoughts on the formatting, as well. I initally had something that was a bit more... broken (sort of like in 'Sweven' and 'Splits lips upon stars'), but eventually thought that maybe something simpler would be better.

Also, two poems in one month! :O 


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17/07/13
Thank you so much to =Riemea for suggesting and ^Beccalicious for featuring this! (Please send some love their way :love:)
Thank you all for the lovely comments and favs. I'm afraid that I won't be able to personally thank for favs (if only work wasn't keeping me so busy :crying:), but they are greatly appreciated. I will reply to every comment soon though. Thank you! :heart:
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VanquishedEyes's avatar
Nice end rhythmic part. I love it as whole, and it kept me dwelling through the beat to the softness it brought with each tenderly pieced word.